New song - feedback wanted plz

geekgirl101

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I decided to scrap my last song for the time being and after some inspiration I've written a newer song I've titled How Many More. It's labelled as a demo for the time being since I'm seeing someone after the weekend for voice and mic training to see whether I can improve the solo sections and I'm not a sound engineer so anyone who's a pro in that field may well notice kinks that could make them cringe. Anyways it's up for constructive criticizm and I'd appreciate any feedback please.

Download: Melanie Jean - How Many More (Demo).mp3

Lyrics:

In a world fighting against abuse, racism, and poverty,
In a world constantly under threat of terrorism and war,
In a world that's trying hard to grasp onto what's left of our humanity,
We need to ask ourselves this question...
HOW MANY MORE


Chorus
How many more
People gonna lie
How many more
People gonna sigh
How many more
Children have to die
In the name of the human race

How many more
Children have to cry
How many more
People asking why
How many more
Times we gotta try
To make this world a better place x2

There is a time when we must come together
As one big family,
And we shall stand, standing shoulder to shoulder
To show this world we are free.

It really doesn't matter if you're black or white,
You're still my sisters and brothers,
So why must we continue to fight
When we can show this world what love is

Chorus

In times of trouble we should never surrender
Even when all hope is lost and gone.
We have to keep on striving to love one another
To bring peace and an end to war.

We gotta open up our eyes and see the time is right
When our voices need to be spoken.
Why do we keep pretending everything is alright
When this world is still clearly broken?

Chorus

So much war
So much destruction
Our planet's a victim of our corruption


Chorusx3

How many more
 
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